Email Sequences — Review + Reword
19 emails across 8 sequences. Full text with cannibalisation check, SOP alignment, and complete rewrites in Harry’s voice.
April 2026
Got it, {{first_name}}. Here’s what happens next.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Just got your application for the Hawk Academy Workshop. Nice one.
I want to be straight with you about what happens from here.
We review every application personally. This isn't a "pay and show up" event. We cap it at 30 people because I want everyone in that room to walk out with a working SEO strategy, not a notebook full of theory.
So we look at every application to make sure we can actually help you.
You'll hear back from us within 48 hours.
Here's what you're in the running for:
- 2 full days of hands-on SEO and AI Search strategy, built around YOUR business
- A custom playbook you'll build in the room (not a generic PDF)
- Claude AI workflows that let you keep building pages in hours, not weeks
- 6 months of support and accountability after the workshop
- The Tailfeather Guarantee: if you don't get value, full refund + $500 toward your travel (full terms)
We don't teach theory. We build. You'll leave with pages live, strategies mapped, and a plan you actually understand.
This is the same approach behind Officeworks' 60% organic growth, QuickBooks' 116% traffic growth across APAC, and Bondi Sands' 94% keyword growth. It works. The workshop is where we teach you to do it yourself.
Sit tight. I'll be in touch soon.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — casual, direct, sounds like Harry talking to someone who just applied. The case studies (Officeworks, QuickBooks, Bondi Sands) are credibility markers, not a sales pitch against anyone. Good.
Minor fixes: The ICP is small businesses not getting consistent leads from Google — the bullet list should reflect outcomes (show up, get found) rather than leading with “SEO.” Seed the catchphrase. Seed Hawk OS early.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Just got your application for the Hawk Academy Workshop. Nice one.
I want to be straight with you about what happens from here.
We review every application personally. This isn’t a “pay and show up” event. We cap it at 30 people because I want everyone in that room to walk out knowing exactly how to show up on Google and in AI Search. Not theory. A working system.
So we look at every application to make sure we can actually help you.
You’ll hear back from us within 48 hours.
Here’s what you’re in the running for:
- 2 full days of hands-on work, built around YOUR business and YOUR site
- A custom playbook you’ll build in the room (not a generic PDF)
- Hawk OS workflows — the same AI system our agency runs on — so you can keep building pages in hours, not weeks
- 6 months of support and accountability after the workshop
- The Tailfeather Guarantee: if you don’t get value, full refund + $500 toward your travel (full terms)
We don’t teach theory. We build. You’ll leave with pages live, strategies mapped, and a plan you actually understand.
This is the same approach behind Officeworks’ 60% organic growth, QuickBooks’ 116% traffic growth across APAC, and Bondi Sands’ 94% keyword growth. It works. The workshop is where we teach you to do it yourself.
Stop guessing. Start showing up.
Sit tight. I’ll be in touch soon.
Harry
Why I built this workshop (the real reason)
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Quick context on who's reviewing your application.
I run StudioHawk. Australia's largest dedicated SEO agency. 120+ people across Melbourne, Sydney, London, and Atlanta. We manage SEO for over 500 clients, including Officeworks, QuickBooks, and Bondi Sands.
Forbes 30 Under 30. 42 industry awards across three countries. Seven times Best Large SEO Agency, judged by 50 independent reviewers.
I'm not listing that to impress you. I'm listing it because the bigger the agency got, the bigger the clients we worked with, and the less it made sense for us to take on small businesses.
Not because we didn't want to. Because the model doesn't work.
You can't charge someone five grand a month when they're turning over two hundred K. The math doesn't add up for either side.
But those businesses still need SEO. They still need to show up on Google and in AI Search. And nobody was helping them do it properly.
That bugged me.
So I built the workshop. Same methodology we use for Officeworks. Same AI workflows my team of 120 uses every day. But instead of a $60K/year retainer, it's two days in a room with us, building it on your actual site, for $2,500 once.
Plus six months of support after. Weekly calls, same-day responses, real accountability. Not a course you'll forget about. Actual humans helping with your actual business.
Your application is being reviewed right now. You'll hear from me within 48 hours.
Harry
Review
High — Cannibalisation risk.
Voice check: The tone is mostly good — direct, personal, Harry-like. But the “I got too big for small business” framing is risky. It reads like “we stopped caring about people like you because you can’t afford us.” That’s not what Harry means, but it’s how some readers will take it.
Agency credibility framing: The “$60K/year retainer” comparison positions the agency model as overpriced for the reader. This is sent from harry@studiohawk.com.au. It sets up a “workshop vs agency” framing that primes the reader to think agencies are expensive for what they do. Same trajectory as DR-12.
Forbes reference: Remove per updated credibility guidelines. Use “Seven times Best Large SEO Agency, judged by fifty independent reviewers. Forty-two industry awards across three countries” instead.
ICP language: Don’t say “the model doesn’t work” — the model works fine, it’s just designed for a different stage. Reframe: “Most small businesses don’t need five grand a month — they need the foundation first.”
Recommendation: Reframe the origin story completely. The workshop exists because most small businesses need the foundation before they invest. Not because agencies are broken.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Quick context on who’s reviewing your application.
I run StudioHawk. Australia’s largest dedicated SEO agency. A hundred and twenty people across Melbourne, Sydney, London, and Atlanta. We manage SEO for over five hundred clients, including Officeworks, QuickBooks, and Bondi Sands.
Seven times Best Large SEO Agency, judged by fifty independent reviewers. Forty-two industry awards across three countries.
I’m not listing that to impress you. I’m listing it so you know who’s behind this.
I built the workshop because most small businesses don’t need five grand a month. They need the foundation first.
Think about it. If you don’t understand what actually moves the needle in search, how do you know if any marketing spend is working? You don’t. You’re guessing. And guessing gets expensive.
The workshop gives you the foundation. Same methodology we use for Officeworks. Same AI workflows my team uses every day, powered by Hawk OS — a version of the same AI system our agency runs on. Two days, your actual site, $2,500 once.
Three of my people work full-time on AI implementation, building off what a hundred and twenty SEO specialists do daily. That’s what you’re getting access to.
Plus six months of support after. Weekly calls, same-day responses, real accountability. Not a course you’ll forget about. Actual humans helping with your actual business.
Your application is being reviewed right now. You’ll hear from me within 48 hours.
Harry
You’re in, {{first_name}}. Secure your spot.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
You're in.
I reviewed your application and had a look at {{website_url}}. Genuinely looking forward to digging into this with you.
Here's the next step: secure your spot.
We've accepted your application for the {{workshop_city}} workshop. To lock in your seat, complete your payment within the next 48 hours. After that, your spot goes to the next person on the waitlist.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
What you're locking in:
- Date: {{workshop_date}}
- Time: 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM, both days
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- 2 full days of hands-on SEO and AI workflow building on YOUR site
- Claude AI workflows you'll keep using long after the workshop
- 6 months of community access, weekly advisory calls, and accountability
- The Tailfeather Guarantee: full refund + $500 toward travel if it's not worth it
Why 48 hours? We cap it at 30 people. Every spot matters. If you're in, we need to know so we can prep for your business specifically. If you need more time, just reply and we'll work something out.
That's founders pricing at $2,500, down from $3,500. First thirty people only. When those seats fill, the price goes up and it doesn't come back.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is strong — direct, urgent without being pushy. The 48-hour window is well justified (“we need to prep for your business specifically”). Founders pricing creates urgency without attacking alternatives.
Minor: Update “Claude AI workflows” to include Hawk OS for consistency. Lead with outcomes rather than “SEO and AI workflow building.”
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
You’re in.
I reviewed your application and had a look at {{website_url}}. Genuinely looking forward to digging into this with you.
Here’s the next step: secure your spot.
We’ve accepted your application for the {{workshop_city}} workshop. To lock in your seat, complete your payment within the next 48 hours. After that, your spot goes to the next person on the waitlist.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
What you’re locking in:
- Date: {{workshop_date}}
- Time: 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM, both days
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- 2 full days of hands-on work building real pages on YOUR site
- Hawk OS workflows — the same AI system our agency runs on — that you’ll keep using long after the workshop
- 6 months of community access, weekly advisory calls, and accountability
- The Tailfeather Guarantee: full refund + $500 toward travel if it’s not worth it
Why 48 hours? We cap it at 30 people. Every spot matters. If you’re in, we need to know so we can prep for your business specifically. If you need more time, just reply and we’ll work something out.
That’s founders pricing at $2,500, down from $3,500. First thirty people only. When those seats fill, the price goes up and it doesn’t come back.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
Harry
Your spot is still open, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Quick one. Your spot for the {{workshop_city}} workshop is still being held, but you've got about 24 hours before it goes to the next person on the waitlist.
I get it. $2,500 is a real decision. So let me put it in context.
Option A: Hire an SEO agency. Average cost: $3,000 to $5,000 a month. Locked in for 6 to 12 months. Total: $36,000 to $60,000 a year. And you still don't understand what they're doing.
Option B: The workshop. $2,500 once. Two days. You leave with pages live on your site, a strategy you built yourself, an AI workflow you can repeat every week, and six months of support. Total: $2,500.
Even if the workshop only saves you from signing one bad agency contract, it's paid for itself ten times over.
And if it doesn't deliver? Full refund. Plus $500 toward your travel. That's the Tailfeather Guarantee. The risk is literally zero.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
If something's come up and you need more time, just reply. We'll sort it out.
Harry
Review
CRITICAL: Same problem as DR-12.
The “Option A vs Option B” framing explicitly positions hiring an SEO agency as the bad choice: expensive, opaque, locked in. This email is sent from harry@studiohawk.com.au. Harry runs Australia’s largest dedicated SEO agency. The comparison is self-sabotage.
The line “Even if the workshop only saves you from signing one bad agency contract” frames every agency engagement as potentially “bad.” That undermines StudioHawk’s entire business model.
The fix: Compare to “spending money on marketing you can’t measure” not “hiring an agency.” Frame the $2,500 as education before investment — foundation before spend. The reader should think “I should learn first” not “agencies are a scam.”
SOP note: Per SOP 26 (evidence standard), the value justification should be outcomes-based, not competitor-bashing. The Tailfeather Guarantee is strong enough on its own.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Quick one. Your spot for the {{workshop_city}} workshop is still being held, but you’ve got about 24 hours before it goes to the next person on the waitlist.
I get it. $2,500 is a real decision. So let me put it in context.
Most business owners spend money on marketing they can’t measure. Google Ads they’re not sure are working. Content that doesn’t rank. Tools they signed up for and never opened. They spend before they understand what actually moves the needle. That gets expensive fast.
The workshop flips that. In two days, you’ll understand exactly how Google and AI Search work for your business. You’ll build real pages on your actual site. You’ll walk out with Hawk OS workflows you can repeat every week. And you’ll have six months of support to make sure it sticks.
That means whatever you do next — keep building yourself, bring in help, or scale up — you’ll make that call from a position of knowledge. Not guesswork. That’s worth a lot more than $2,500.
And if it doesn’t deliver? Full refund. Plus $500 toward your travel. That’s the Tailfeather Guarantee. The risk is literally zero.
Secure My Spot — $2,500
If something’s come up and you need more time, just reply. We’ll sort it out.
Harry
Your spot has been released, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Your 48-hour window has closed and your spot for the {{workshop_city}} workshop has been released to the waitlist.
I know life gets busy. No hard feelings.
If you've changed your mind and still want in, reply to this email. If there's still a seat available, I'll hold it for you for 24 hours. No guarantees, but I'll do my best.
If the timing just isn't right, I'd recommend starting with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. Over 3,400 business owners are already inside learning SEO and AI Search fundamentals. It's completely free and it's a solid head start for whenever you're ready.
Either way, you were accepted for a reason. Your business is at the right stage for this. When the next round opens, you'll have priority. No need to reapply.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand. The tone is respectful — no guilt, no pressure, just a clear door left open. Redirecting to the free course is a good move. “You were accepted for a reason” is a nice touch that keeps the relationship warm.
Minor: Lead with outcomes language rather than “learning SEO and AI Search fundamentals.”
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Your 48-hour window has closed and your spot for the {{workshop_city}} workshop has been released to the waitlist.
I know life gets busy. No hard feelings.
If you’ve changed your mind and still want in, reply to this email. If there’s still a seat available, I’ll hold it for you for 24 hours. No guarantees, but I’ll do my best.
If the timing just isn’t right, I’d recommend starting with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. Over 3,400 business owners are already inside learning how to show up on Google and in AI Search. Completely free. Solid head start for whenever you’re ready.
Either way, you were accepted for a reason. Your business is at the right stage for this. When the next round opens, you’ll have priority. No need to reapply.
Harry
Locked in, {{first_name}}. Here’s everything you need.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Payment received. You're officially locked in for the Hawk Academy Workshop in {{workshop_city}}.
The details:
- Date: {{workshop_date}}
- Time: 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM, both days
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- Parking: {{parking_details}}
I've attached a calendar invite. Add it now so it doesn't slip.
Your one task right now: Make sure you can log into your website's CMS (WordPress, Shopify, Wix, whatever you use). Just check you can access the backend and edit pages. If your password is lost, reset it today while you're thinking about it.
That's it. Two minutes.
I'll send you a full tech prep checklist closer to the day, but getting your login sorted now saves you stress later.
You'll get a few emails from me over the next few weeks. Not marketing. Actual prep. A tech checklist, a quick win you can try on your site, and an intro to the other people in your cohort.
If you need to reach me before the workshop, just reply to this email.
See you in {{workshop_city}}.
Harry
[Calendar Invite Attached: Hawk Academy Workshop — {{workshop_date}}]
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — efficient, practical, zero fluff. Good operational email. No changes needed to substance.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Payment received. You’re officially locked in for the Hawk Academy Workshop in {{workshop_city}}.
The details:
- Date: {{workshop_date}}
- Time: 9:00 AM to 5:00 PM, both days
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- Parking: {{parking_details}}
I’ve attached a calendar invite. Add it now so it doesn’t slip.
Your one task right now: Make sure you can log into your website’s CMS (WordPress, Shopify, Wix, whatever you use). Just check you can access the backend and edit pages. If your password is lost, reset it today while you’re thinking about it.
That’s it. Two minutes.
I’ll send you a full tech prep checklist closer to the day, but getting your login sorted now saves you stress later.
You’ll get a few emails from me over the next few weeks. Not marketing. Actual prep. A tech checklist, a quick win you can try on your site, and an intro to the other people in your cohort.
If you need to reach me before the workshop, just reply to this email.
See you in {{workshop_city}}.
Harry
[Calendar Invite Attached: Hawk Academy Workshop — {{workshop_date}}]
Try this on your site before the workshop (15 mins)
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Here's something from the workshop playbook. Takes 15 minutes and gives you a head start on what we'll build together.
The "Service + Suburb" Audit:
- Open Google. Search for [what you do] + [where you do it] (e.g. "plumber Geelong" or "physio Bondi Junction")
- Are you on page one? If not, check if you even have a dedicated page for that combination on your site
- Now try 3 to 4 variations. Different suburbs, different services
- Write down every combination where you're NOT on page one but should be
That list? That's your hit list for day one of the workshop. Those are the pages we're going to build together, live, on your site, using Claude to do the heavy lifting.
Most businesses I audit have 10 to 30 of these gaps. Each one is a page that could be bringing in leads right now but isn't.
That's what we fix.
Come to the workshop with that list and you'll be building from minute one.
Harry
Review
No cannibalisation issues. Voice is great — practical, actionable, sounds like Harry giving homework to a mate.
Missing Hawk OS reference. The email mentions “using Claude to do the heavy lifting” but doesn’t mention Hawk OS. This audit is a taste of what Hawk OS automates — say that. Seeds the product name before they arrive.
ICP language: “Pages that could be bringing in leads right now but isn’t” is good — this is the right framing. Keep it.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Here’s something from the workshop playbook. Takes 15 minutes and gives you a head start on what we’ll build together.
The “Service + Suburb” Audit:
- Open Google. Search for [what you do] + [where you do it] (e.g. “plumber Geelong” or “physio Bondi Junction”)
- Are you on page one? If not, check if you even have a dedicated page for that combination on your site
- Now try 3 to 4 variations. Different suburbs, different services
- Write down every combination where you’re NOT on page one but should be
That list? That’s your hit list for day one of the workshop. Those are the pages we’re going to build together, live, on your site, using Hawk OS to do the heavy lifting.
Most businesses I audit have 10 to 30 of these gaps. Each one is a page that could be bringing in leads right now but isn’t. That’s what we fix.
This is a taste of what Hawk OS automates for you after the workshop — finding these gaps and building the pages, on repeat, every week.
Come to the workshop with that list and you’ll be building from minute one.
Harry
What businesses like yours have built
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Wanted to share some numbers so you know what's possible.
The methodology we teach in the workshop is the same one our agency uses for clients like Officeworks, QuickBooks, and Bondi Sands. Here's what it's done:
- Officeworks: 60% increase in organic traffic
- QuickBooks: 116% non-brand traffic growth across APAC
- Bondi Sands: 94% keyword growth in the Australian market
Melbourne plumber: Zero organic leads to 200/month in 12 months. Service-plus-suburb pages. No agency, no ads. Just structured content targeting what customers were already searching for.
Sydney physio clinic: Three locations, 100% dependent on Google Ads. Built local content strategy, organic became their #1 channel within six months. Cut ad spend by 40%, more leads than before.
Online skincare brand: Invisible in AI Search. Restructured product pages and built FAQ content that ChatGPT and Perplexity now cite. Organic traffic doubled in four months.
These aren't tricks or hacks. It's a structured approach to technical SEO, content strategy, and AI tools. Exactly what you'll build in the workshop, on your own site.
The difference between hearing about SEO and actually building it yourself is everything. That's what the two days are for.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. The case studies use StudioHawk’s work as proof the methodology works, not as a comparison. The small business examples (plumber, physio, skincare) are strong — relatable to the ICP without trashing any alternative. Voice is on-brand.
Minor: “No agency, no ads” in the plumber example could be read as anti-agency. Soften to just describe what they did, not what they didn’t do. Lead with outcomes over “SEO” language.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Wanted to share some numbers so you know what’s possible.
The methodology we teach in the workshop is the same one our agency uses for clients like Officeworks, QuickBooks, and Bondi Sands. Here’s what it’s done:
- Officeworks: 60% increase in organic traffic
- QuickBooks: 116% non-brand traffic growth across APAC
- Bondi Sands: 94% keyword growth in the Australian market
Melbourne plumber: Went from barely showing up on Google to 200 organic leads a month in 12 months. Service-plus-suburb pages. Structured content targeting what customers were already searching for.
Sydney physio clinic: Three locations, completely dependent on paid ads. Built a local content strategy, organic became their number one channel within six months. Cut ad spend by 40%, more leads than before.
Online skincare brand: Invisible in AI Search. Restructured product pages and built FAQ content that ChatGPT and Perplexity now cite. Organic traffic doubled in four months.
These aren’t tricks or hacks. It’s a structured approach to showing up where your customers are already looking — Google, AI Search, all of it. Exactly what you’ll build in the workshop, on your own site.
The difference between hearing about this stuff and actually building it yourself is everything. That’s what the two days are for.
Harry
Tech checklist. Do this before {{workshop_date}}. (10 mins)
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Workshop's in two weeks. Here's a quick checklist so you're not spending the first hour of day one setting up accounts.
The 10-minute checklist:
- Website CMS access. Log in, make sure you can edit pages. WordPress, Shopify, Wix, Squarespace, whatever you use.
- Google Search Console. Go to search.google.com/search-console. If your site is there, you're good. If not, don't stress. We'll set it up, but it's faster if it's already linked.
- Google Analytics. Same deal. analytics.google.com. Check you can see your data.
- Claude account. Go to claude.ai and create a free account if you don't have one. We'll be using this throughout both days.
- Laptop charged + updated. Run your system updates NOW. I've seen someone lose 45 minutes to a Windows update on day one. Don't be that person.
- Phone hotspot. Venue has wi-fi, but always have a backup.
If you hit a wall on any of these, just reply to this email. My team will sort it before the day.
Harry
Review
No cannibalisation issues. Voice is great — the Windows update line is peak Harry.
Missing Hawk OS reference. The Claude account bullet should mention Hawk OS. They’re not just using Claude generically — they’ll be using Hawk OS, the AI system built on top of Claude, to run their workflows. Name it now so it’s not a surprise on the day.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Workshop’s in two weeks. Here’s a quick checklist so you’re not spending the first hour of day one setting up accounts.
The 10-minute checklist:
- Website CMS access. Log in, make sure you can edit pages. WordPress, Shopify, Wix, Squarespace, whatever you use.
- Google Search Console. Go to search.google.com/search-console. If your site is there, you’re good. If not, don’t stress. We’ll set it up, but it’s faster if it’s already linked.
- Google Analytics. Same deal. analytics.google.com. Check you can see your data.
- Claude account. Go to claude.ai and create a free account if you don’t have one. You’ll be using Hawk OS throughout both days — a version of the same AI system our agency runs on. It runs on top of Claude, so you need the account. You’ll get Hawk OS access on the day.
- Laptop charged + updated. Run your system updates NOW. I’ve seen someone lose 45 minutes to a Windows update on day one. Don’t be that person.
- Phone hotspot. Venue has wi-fi, but always have a backup.
If you hit a wall on any of these, just reply to this email. My team will sort it before the day.
Harry
The 30 people in the room with you
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
One week out. Wanted to give you a sense of who's in the room.
Your {{workshop_city}} cohort:
[DYNAMIC CONTENT — populate with anonymised or first-name summaries of confirmed attendees, e.g.:]
- A cafe owner in {{suburb}} who's been paying $3K a month to an agency and wants to understand what they're actually getting
- An ecommerce founder selling {{product_type}} who's 100% reliant on Google Ads and wants organic traffic
- A {{service_type}} with 3 locations who's never done SEO but knows they're leaving money on the table
- A tradesperson who built their business on word of mouth and wants to show up when people search
- [8-12 anonymised descriptions total]
You're going to be sitting next to people in the exact same position as you. Different industries, same challenge: how do I get found online without paying for every click?
Some of the best stuff that comes out of these workshops isn't just the SEO. It's the connections. You'll be in a room with 29 other business owners who are all serious enough to show up and do the work.
See you in 7 days.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand. The dynamic cohort descriptions create social proof and anticipation.
Minor note: The first example mentions “paying $3K a month to an agency and wants to understand what they’re actually getting.” In context it’s describing someone’s situation, not attacking agencies. But reframe slightly — the person wants to understand their marketing, not audit their agency.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
One week out. Wanted to give you a sense of who’s in the room.
Your {{workshop_city}} cohort:
[DYNAMIC CONTENT — populate with anonymised or first-name summaries of confirmed attendees, e.g.:]
- A cafe owner in {{suburb}} who’s spending on marketing but wants to actually understand what’s working
- An ecommerce founder selling {{product_type}} who’s 100% reliant on Google Ads and wants to show up organically
- A {{service_type}} with 3 locations who knows they’re leaving money on the table but doesn’t know where to start
- A tradesperson who built their business on word of mouth and wants to show up when people search
- [8-12 anonymised descriptions total]
You’re going to be sitting next to people in the exact same position as you. Different industries, same challenge: how do I get found online without paying for every click?
Some of the best stuff that comes out of these workshops isn’t just the search strategy. It’s the connections. You’ll be in a room with 29 other business owners who are all serious enough to show up and do the work.
See you in 7 days.
Harry
See you tomorrow, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Tomorrow's the day. Here's everything you need.
Logistics:
- Doors open: 8:30 AM
- We start: 9:00 AM sharp
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- Parking: {{parking_details}}
- Lunch: Provided both days. Reply now if you have dietary requirements.
Bring:
- Laptop (charged)
- CMS login
- Google Search Console access
- Your "Service + Suburb" hit list from the email I sent you (if you did it. No stress if not).
Quick FAQ:
What if I need to leave early? We'd rather you didn't. The afternoon sessions build on the morning. But if something comes up, let us know. We'll make sure you get the materials and can catch up in the 6-month support.
Should I bring anything besides my laptop? Nope. Playbooks are printed and waiting for you. Power boards at every desk. Just bring your laptop, your logins, and yourself.
Is there a dress code? No. Wear whatever you're comfortable in. I'll be in a black t-shirt. As always.
What's the vibe? Thirty people, all building. It's focused but it's not tense. Think workshop, not exam. You'll be doing real work on your real business alongside people in the same position as you.
I've run these workshops enough times to know: the people who show up ready to work walk out with something genuinely valuable. You're one of thirty people in that room tomorrow. Make the most of it.
See you at 8:30.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — the “I’ll be in a black t-shirt. As always.” line is very Harry. Good operational email with personality.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Tomorrow’s the day. Here’s everything you need.
Logistics:
- Doors open: 8:30 AM
- We start: 9:00 AM sharp
- Venue: {{venue_name}}, {{venue_address}}
- Parking: {{parking_details}}
- Lunch: Provided both days. Reply now if you have dietary requirements.
Bring:
- Laptop (charged)
- CMS login
- Google Search Console access
- Your “Service + Suburb” hit list from the email I sent you (if you did it. No stress if not).
Quick FAQ:
What if I need to leave early? We’d rather you didn’t. The afternoon sessions build on the morning. But if something comes up, let us know. We’ll make sure you get the materials and can catch up in the 6-month support.
Should I bring anything besides my laptop? Nope. Playbooks are printed and waiting for you. Power boards at every desk. Just bring your laptop, your logins, and yourself.
Is there a dress code? No. Wear whatever you’re comfortable in. I’ll be in a black t-shirt. As always.
What’s the vibe? Thirty people, all building. It’s focused but it’s not tense. Think workshop, not exam. You’ll be doing real work on your real business alongside people in the same position as you.
I’ve run these workshops enough times to know: the people who show up ready to work walk out with something genuinely valuable. You’re one of thirty people in that room tomorrow. Make the most of it.
See you at 8:30.
Harry
Today’s the day. See you at 8:30.
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{{first_name}},
Doors open at 8:30. Coffee's on. We start at 9.
Bring your laptop. Bring your logins. We handle the rest.
By lunch today you'll have pages live on your site. That's not aspirational. That's literally the plan.
See you soon.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is perfect — short, punchy, confident. “That’s not aspirational. That’s literally the plan.” is a great line. Don’t touch this one.
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{{first_name}},
Doors open at 8:30. Coffee’s on. We start at 9.
Bring your laptop. Bring your logins. We handle the rest.
By lunch today you’ll have pages live on your site. That’s not aspirational. That’s literally the plan.
See you soon.
Harry
Honest update on your application, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Thanks for applying for the Hawk Academy Workshop. I appreciate you putting your hand up. It tells me you're serious about growing your business through search.
I want to be honest with you: after reviewing your application, we don't think the workshop is the right fit for you right now.
That's not a reflection on you or your business. The workshop is designed for a specific stage. Business owners who already have a website, some traffic, and are ready to build an SEO strategy on top of that foundation.
From what you've told us, there's a better place to start.
Here's what I'd recommend:
Start with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. It's completely free. Over 3,400 people are already in there learning the fundamentals of SEO and AI Search. It covers:
- How search engines actually work
- Basic technical SEO you can fix yourself
- Content strategy fundamentals
- How to use AI tools for search
It's the same foundation we build on in the workshop. Just self-paced and free.
{{business_name}} has potential. I mean that.
This isn't a no forever. Once you've worked through the fundamentals and your business is at a point where the workshop would genuinely move the needle, we'd love to have you apply again. The workshop runs in multiple cities throughout the year.
If you have any questions, reply to this email. I read everything.
Harry Sanders
CEO, StudioHawk
Founder, Hawk Academy
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — honest, kind without being soft. “This isn’t a no forever” is well handled. The redirect to the free course is genuine and useful. Signing off with CEO title is appropriate here because it’s a formal decision.
ICP note: “Business owners who already have a website, some traffic” aligns with the ICP of businesses not getting consistent leads from Google. Good.
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Hey {{first_name}},
Thanks for applying for the Hawk Academy Workshop. I appreciate you putting your hand up. It tells me you’re serious about growing your business.
I want to be honest with you: after reviewing your application, we don’t think the workshop is the right fit for you right now.
That’s not a reflection on you or your business. The workshop is designed for a specific stage — business owners who already have a website and some traction, but aren’t getting consistent leads from Google or AI Search yet.
From what you’ve told us, there’s a better place to start.
Here’s what I’d recommend:
Start with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. It’s completely free. Over 3,400 people are already in there learning how to show up on Google and get found in AI Search. It covers:
- How search engines actually work
- Basic technical fixes you can do yourself
- Content strategy fundamentals
- How to use AI tools to get found online
It’s the same foundation we build on in the workshop. Just self-paced and free.
{{business_name}} has potential. I mean that.
This isn’t a no forever. Once you’ve worked through the fundamentals and your business is at a point where the workshop would genuinely move the needle, we’d love to have you apply again. The workshop runs in multiple cities throughout the year.
If you have any questions, reply to this email. I read everything.
Harry Sanders
CEO, StudioHawk
Founder, Hawk Academy
You qualified, {{first_name}}. But we’re full.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Good news and bad news.
Good news: your application was strong. You're exactly the kind of person this workshop is built for.
Bad news: the {{workshop_city}} workshop is full. Thirty seats, all taken.
Here's what I'd like to do. I'm putting you at the top of the list for the next workshop. As soon as we lock in dates, you'll be the first to know and you'll get priority acceptance. No need to reapply.
In the meantime, get a head start with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. Over 3,400 people are already in there. The more you know going in, the more you'll get out of the two days.
I'll be in touch as soon as the next round opens up.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand. Short, respectful, keeps the person warm. Good use of the free course as a bridge.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
Good news and bad news.
Good news: your application was strong. You’re exactly the kind of person this workshop is built for.
Bad news: the {{workshop_city}} workshop is full. Thirty seats, all taken.
Here’s what I’d like to do. I’m putting you at the top of the list for the next workshop. As soon as we lock in dates, you’ll be the first to know and you’ll get priority acceptance. No need to reapply.
In the meantime, get a head start with the free Hawk Academy course at hawkacademy.co. Over 3,400 people are already in there learning how to show up on Google and in AI Search. The more you know going in, the more you’ll get out of the two days.
I’ll be in touch as soon as the next round opens up.
Harry
You did it, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
That was a big two days. Well done.
Here's everything you need going forward:
Your resources:
- Your workshop playbook (the one you built). Keep it. It's yours.
- All slide decks and reference materials: [link to shared drive]
- Recording of any demo sessions: [link if applicable]
Your 6-month support starts now:
- Join the community here: [link to community platform]
- Weekly advisory calls: every {{day_of_week}} at {{time}} AEST. First one is next week.
- Post any question, any time. We aim for same-day or next-day responses.
The work you did in that room is real. Pages are live. Strategy is mapped. Now the job is to keep building on it, and that's exactly what the next six months are for.
If anything's broken, unclear, or you just want to talk through next steps, reply to this email or post in the community. We're here.
Proud of the work you put in.
Harry
Review
No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — warm but not gushy.
Missing Hawk OS reference. The resource list should include Hawk OS workflows. They just spent two days building with it — remind them it’s theirs to keep using. This is the most natural place to reinforce the product name.
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Hey {{first_name}},
That was a big two days. Well done.
Here’s everything you need going forward:
Your resources:
- Your workshop playbook (the one you built). Keep it. It’s yours.
- Your Hawk OS workflows (the ones you built in the workshop). Log in at [Hawk OS link] — everything you built is saved and ready to use.
- All slide decks and reference materials: [link to shared drive]
- Recording of any demo sessions: [link if applicable]
Your 6-month support starts now:
- Join the community here: [link to community platform]
- Weekly advisory calls: every {{day_of_week}} at {{time}} AEST. First one is next week.
- Post any question, any time. We aim for same-day or next-day responses.
The work you did in that room is real. Pages are live. Strategy is mapped. Now the job is to keep building on it, and that’s exactly what the next six months are for.
If anything’s broken, unclear, or you just want to talk through next steps, reply to this email or post in the community. We’re here.
Proud of the work you put in.
Harry
Quick check-in. How’s it going?
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
It's been a few days since the workshop. Wanted to check in.
Three things to do this week if you haven't already:
- Check your pages are still live and indexed. Go to Google, type
site:{{website_url}}and make sure your new pages show up. If they don't, post in the community and we'll sort it. - Join your first advisory call. It's this {{day_of_week}} at {{time}} AEST. Even if you don't have questions yet. Showing up keeps momentum. [Link to call]
- Post your first question or win in the community. Doesn't matter how small. The people who engage in the first week get the most out of the six months. That's just the pattern.
If you're stuck on anything, reply to this email. That's what we're here for.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand. Practical, actionable, keeps momentum going. The three-step checklist format is effective.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
It’s been a few days since the workshop. Wanted to check in.
Three things to do this week if you haven’t already:
- Check your pages are still live and indexed. Go to Google, type
site:{{website_url}}and make sure your new pages show up. If they don’t, post in the community and we’ll sort it. - Join your first advisory call. It’s this {{day_of_week}} at {{time}} AEST. Even if you don’t have questions yet. Showing up keeps momentum. [Link to call]
- Post your first question or win in the community. Doesn’t matter how small. The people who engage in the first week get the most out of the six months. That’s just the pattern.
If you’re stuck on anything, reply to this email. That’s what we’re here for.
Harry
One month in. Let’s see where you’re at.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
It's been a month since the workshop. Time for a quick pulse check.
By now, you should be seeing:
- Your new pages indexed in Google (check Search Console, then Pages)
- Initial impressions and possibly early clicks (Coverage, then Performance)
- A clearer picture of which keywords are starting to move
If you're NOT seeing that, don't panic. But do post in the community or jump on the next advisory call. A month is enough time to spot if something's off, and we'd rather fix it now than three months from now.
Quick reminder: you've got five more months of support. Use it. The people who check in regularly, ask questions, and keep building are the ones who see real results by month six.
How's it going? Reply and let me know. Even a one-liner. I read every one.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand. Good accountability email — sets expectations without creating panic. “We’d rather fix it now than three months from now” is exactly the right tone.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
It’s been a month since the workshop. Time for a quick pulse check.
By now, you should be seeing:
- Your new pages indexed in Google (check Search Console, then Pages)
- Initial impressions and possibly early clicks (Coverage, then Performance)
- A clearer picture of which keywords are starting to move
If you’re NOT seeing that, don’t panic. But do post in the community or jump on the next advisory call. A month is enough time to spot if something’s off, and we’d rather fix it now than three months from now.
Quick reminder: you’ve got five more months of support. Use it. The people who check in regularly, ask questions, and keep building are the ones who see real results by month six.
How’s it going? Reply and let me know. Even a one-liner. I read every one.
Harry
Six months, {{first_name}}. Let’s talk about what’s next.
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
Six months ago you walked into a room with 29 other business owners and built something from scratch.
Today, your support period officially wraps up.
Before it does, I want to ask you two things:
1. How did it go? Seriously. I want to know. What worked? What didn't? What surprised you? Reply to this email with as much or as little as you want. Every response helps us make the next workshop better.
2. Would you leave a quick testimonial? If the workshop made a real difference for your business, I'd genuinely appreciate a few sentences about your experience. You can reply to this email or fill out this quick form: [testimonial form link]. Your words help the next person who's sitting where you were six months ago, wondering if it's worth it.
What happens now:
- Your community access stays active for another 30 days (wind-down period)
- Advisory call recordings stay available permanently
- If you want to continue with more advanced support, StudioHawk offers ongoing SEO consulting. Reply and I'll connect you with the right person on my team
- The next workshop round is opening soon. If you know someone who'd benefit, send them to hawkacademy.co/workshop
It's been a good six months. Thanks for trusting us with your business.
Harry
Review
High — Agency framing needs care.
No cannibalisation in the traditional sense, but the StudioHawk consulting mention needs careful framing. After 19 emails that position the workshop as the alternative to big marketing spend, suddenly offering agency services could feel like a bait-and-switch.
The fix: Frame it as a natural graduation: “If your business has outgrown DIY and you need a team behind you.” Not “now hire us for the thing we implied you didn’t need.”
Missing Hawk OS reference. Six months in, they should know about Hawk OS updates. Mention that Hawk OS continues to evolve and they’ll keep access to new workflows. This reinforces ongoing value and keeps the product name alive.
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Hey {{first_name}},
Six months ago you walked into a room with 29 other business owners and built something from scratch.
Today, your support period officially wraps up.
Before it does, I want to ask you two things:
1. How did it go? Seriously. I want to know. What worked? What didn’t? What surprised you? Reply to this email with as much or as little as you want. Every response helps us make the next workshop better.
2. Would you leave a quick testimonial? If the workshop made a real difference for your business, I’d genuinely appreciate a few sentences about your experience. You can reply to this email or fill out this quick form: [testimonial form link]. Your words help the next person who’s sitting where you were six months ago, wondering if it’s worth it.
What happens now:
- Your community access stays active for another 30 days (wind-down period)
- Advisory call recordings stay available permanently
- Your Hawk OS access stays active. We’re shipping updates regularly — new workflows, new AI Search features — and you’ll keep getting them
- If your business has outgrown DIY and you need a team behind you, my team at StudioHawk can pick up where you left off. You already speak the language, which means you’ll get more out of it than most. Reply and I’ll connect you with the right person
- The next workshop round is opening soon. If you know someone who’d benefit, send them to hawkacademy.co/workshop
It’s been a good six months. Thanks for trusting us with your business.
Harry
We missed you today, {{first_name}}
Original
Hey {{first_name}},
We had your seat set up this morning and you weren't there. Hope everything's okay.
I don't know what came up, and you don't owe me an explanation. But I don't want you to miss out on what you signed up for.
Here's what I can offer:
Transfer your spot to the next workshop in another city or date. No extra cost, no reapplication. Just reply and we'll sort it.
If something's changed and you can't make any workshop, let us know and we'll work out next steps. The Tailfeather Guarantee covers attendees, but we'll treat you fairly regardless.
Just reply to this email and tell me what works for you.
Harry
Review
Clean. No cannibalisation issues. Voice is on-brand — empathetic without being soft, no guilt trip. “You don’t owe me an explanation” is the right tone. Clean handling of a sensitive situation.
Reworded
Hey {{first_name}},
We had your seat set up this morning and you weren’t there. Hope everything’s okay.
I don’t know what came up, and you don’t owe me an explanation. But I don’t want you to miss out on what you signed up for.
Here’s what I can offer:
Transfer your spot to the next workshop in another city or date. No extra cost, no reapplication. Just reply and we’ll sort it.
If something’s changed and you can’t make any workshop, let us know and we’ll work out next steps. The Tailfeather Guarantee covers attendees, but we’ll treat you fairly regardless.
Just reply to this email and tell me what works for you.
Harry